Comments on Family Business chapter 2

Had plenty of comments on my continuation of Leon22reload's "Family Business" story and find it's easier to reply here.

Anonymous 03/22/16
Keep It Up!

No pun intended. ;-) Definitely keep the story line going. You have the makings of a good series here and I look forward to additional chapters.

Yep, plenty more to come.

Anonymous 03/22/16
Make it a series

We need another series like the Trophy Wives Club to stop getting all romantic about incest! It needs to be about fun and debauchery, not love and procreation. Go for it!

Of course it'll be a series! If you just want nasty family sex, try my "Optocynic 5000" series.

RapidResponder 03/22/16
Solid

Well-written and very readable. I enjoyed it and would be happy to see you continue! ****

Glad you liked it -- will definitely be continued.

billyjim55 03/22/16
GREAT JOB

You picked up thee story just fine, Keep it going.ty/bill

Thank you!

Anonymous 03/22/16
Keep it going!

I love your stories! This one is a brilliant addition to your portfolio. Keep it coming!

Will do!

Anonymous 03/22/16
More, please!

Thank you for continuing this story. Just where are you going to take these massive cocks and breasts?

Stay tuned to find out!

Anonymous 03/23/16
Series

Agree with previous poster. Make it a series. Incest should be fun and nasty. Honestly how many marry their sister? But fuck their sister? A lot more than "experts" tell us. Keep it going.

Again -- why wouldn't I make this a series?

Anonymous 03/23/16
Loved it

All your stories are great and this one is no exception. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Thank you!

Anonymous 03/23/16
Fantastic continuity!

I normally don't care for the huge tit/huge cock scene; however, you did such a terrific job of taking the original story to new heights that I'll be looking forward to your continuing efforts in this same vein. You melded your efforts so well that one wouldn't know of the author change unless informed. Really well done!

Thanks -- I hoped to match Leon's original.

rightbank 03/23/16
Might as well make it a series

you've already established at least three other possible combinations before you start blending the families.

Of course it'll be a series! Why would anyone doubt that?

D_Kacey 03/23/16
Couldn't imagine a better author to take the helm

Fantastic! Like the title says, I couldn't imagine a better author to take the helm from Leon22reloaded. Look forward to hopefully the rest of this series from you.

Thanks -- plenty more to come like I said.

jackal_man 03/23/16
Blast from the past!

Leon22(Reloaded)'s stories from a couple years ago are among my favorite, re-readable entries. The pairings, the potential, the overall tone--I loved them, and were always on my mind whenever I'd check Literotica for updates. When I saw this story pop up on the feed, I was excited and happy to see it continue. I had always imagined what direction the story would go in with the setup from chapter 1, and was curious to see where you'd take it.

While it seems the quality will definitely continue (and capture the spirit of Leon's works), I was a slightly (very slightly) thrown off to see the main pairing be Danny and Alicia again. I loved their pairing in chapter 1 and reread it often--and more is always nice--but after a long wait, part of me was expecting something new.

With that in mind, I thought you did a fantastic job of planting seeds for next chapters, all the while introducing a new character in Tiffany. The burgeoning porn business the brothers are creating will work well with all the hot moms, but it's also nice that younger female characters aren't getting neglected. It also expands options to include both mother/son scenes and brother/sister scenes (in addition to the other pairings being alluded to, of course).

Looking forward to future installments, and to seeing when the brothers finally get with their own mom. Also looking forward to some MMF and MFF threesomes if you ever get around to it!

Curious: did Leon give you the go ahead to continue his other series as well, or just this one?

Thanks -- I know what you mean about using Danny and Alicia again but it would have been too soon to bring in the others just yet. Like you said this was me planting seeds for what's to come, introducing Tiffany (whose appearance was based on Leon's ideas) and building up to involving the other characters in later chapters.



Leon did give me permission to continue his other stories but for now I'm just concentrating on this one.

BH54 03/23/16
Good story to take over

I can hardly wait for all the combinations of the listed characters. Don't forget to make sure that Dad gets caught by the FBI or better yet some biker group.

LOL! No plans for Mr Wright's reintroduction/final fate just yet!

Anonymous 03/24/16
Regarding the calls to make a series

Why go to this trouble and set up so much if it's not a series? The first person we meet, Lisa, still hasn't gotten fucked -- and of there was one character in this who really needs a good fucking it's Lisa. However, in her current frame of mind, I'm not sure she's in any state to really be consenting, so that's why I'm presuming that's being held off for another chapter. Calm her down until she's able to think clearly -- and then fuck her brains out.

Then there's Nicole. She's just waiting for the guys to come (cum?) by, hopefully adding Cassie into the mix. Given what they'd done, why would Danny keep Alicia all to himself?

Not a series? This is ready made for a series, seemingly leading to all the mothers and sisters starring in videos. Hell, Lisa becoming the star of the video series seems to be the natural way out of her financial worries.

The one thing I kinda hope happens is that when Nealson comes back from his business trip he's not the cliche where every married man is an idiot who doesn't know what's going on, especially given Cassie hoping her father doesn't get hurt. Yeah, there are a lot of father/daughter stories, but all too often in stories like this, having him join in would be out of the norm.

Thanks -- I've never had so many calls to make a story a series even though it's obviously set up to be a series!

As to Mr Nealson coming back -- we'll have to see what happens there.

Thanks for all the comments!

Family Business

Just submitted my continuation of Leon22reloaded's story "The Family Business" Leon's already seen it and said

This is fan-fucking-tastic!  You have really captured the characters, and Tiffany is great.  Not a lot of sex but what was there was amazing and the build up is great.  I am sure everyone will love it, and I for one am really looking forward to what you have in store!  So looking forward to more!

so if he's happy, I hope the rest of you will be. Plenty more to come.

Meantime, here's this:

Quick poll

Just realised you can put polls up on this thing -- see above.

Girls fisting girls -- in one hole or the other -- is that something that gets you hot or not?

Replies to comments on Optocynic 5000

There's been a bunch of comments on the Optocynic 5000 story, some positive, some not, so rather than try and address them all there, I've copied them here so I can reply individually.

Anonymous 03/10/16

I always wished that the original story got a continuation but it never happened, so I'm really pleased & entertained by yours. Sure it differs from that one but not in a bad way, new author new approach & style. I do hope you continue your however.

Thanks -- I will be continuing this.

grayge37 03/10/16
Five Stars *****

This was hot in spite of it moving at a fast pace and it's brevity.
Sequel chapter (s) are a MUST!

I have just discovered your stories and now plan to read some or all of them.

It's as brief as the original and deliberately so -- hope you like my other stuff.

dutch513nels 03/10/16
HOT !

That was VERY GOOD . Gave it a 5 . Made my favorite page .. Hope you do more with this . Sister? Sister, Mother . Maybe a hot three way ? Hell of a job Thank You .

Oh yes, sister will be involved and then a threesome. There's nothing clever about this series for me -- it's just pretty predictable porn.

datass9001 03/10/16
Excellent continuation of a great series

I do think the addition of some kind of magical/mystical power was necessary to Optocynic's original series, but it was also fun that it was absent too. I'm glad you're continuing that series. Keep up the great work!

Thanks -- I plan to keep the mystical side of things very light and just sort of hinted at.

Anonymous 03/10/16

Original story by optocynic
https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=686845&page=submissions

That's the one.

Anonymous 03/10/16

There were unfinished part 5 of the original story. I don't know if SirSinn plan to finish it. Maybe he join this new story with old one (orgy with Dan and his mom)???

There were more that 7 yrs from the original story were posted. I was expected that anybody could write continuation/spin offs... Thank you...

No, no plans to directly continue the original story -- I just wanted to use the same set up with my own characters.

Anonymous 03/10/16
Sister

Sister next please then both.

As I mentioned above, the sister will be involved.

Anonymous 03/10/16

Great story! Sister next, then mom and sister in a threeway

See above.

BILLBAD 03/10/16
my first story

original story is the one of first storries i read on this site and hooked me to this site.good tribute to story.keep continue
I dont read big tits and big dicks stories but i made an exception for u

Thanks for making an exception.

Averygoodlay 03/11/16
Not bad

Except for the big cock and tits that so many think they need for a story also the anal ruined the whole thing

Seriously? Did you not read the disclaimer at the start which said the story would be big tits, big dick and anal so don't complain about it in the comments? Jesus!

doug_nought 03/11/16
Great story!

I always was cold towards the original when it essentially turned into a mom-a-slut-lets-gangbang her. This is a great story though, I just wished you had paced it a bit more. The anal could have waited to the next chapter probably. Oh well, 5 stars from me.

Deliberately short and sweet, just like the original.

Anonymous 03/11/16
What language is this?

"Eeehhhhhhh,aaaarrrrrrgggg, aaaaaahhhhheee, eeeeerrrrrrggggg" etc. Not a bad story but it was too rushed and the anal at the end spoiled it.

Again, the disclaimer told you what to expect. As to the "Eeehhhhhhh,aaaarrrrrrgggg, aaaaaahhhhheee, eeeeerrrrrrggggg" -- each to their own.

Anonymous 03/11/16
Keep writing

Could use a little more detail

Thanks.

horny2doit 03/11/16

WOW - a wonderful story - Mom and hung son is so HOT !! The dialogue was pretty good but in the next chapter; can you let it flow with alittle more intimate conversation between Mom and son ?? Of course he really needs to screw her long and hard now that they have agreed this is not a one time thing. His comments have unlocked her real sexiness and how to fill the void of her getting sex. Thank you .......

If you're after character and plot and intimacy, try my "Day By Day" story -- this is just an exercise in smut.

Anonymous 03/11/16

I really liked the story, but you need to edit it a little better, there were places that didn't make sense, and you had to figure out what you meant!

I'll admit I rushed it a little -- will try and catch the edits next time.

Anonymous 03/12/16
Hmmmm!!!

Plagiarize much??? You tried to hide it but you plagiarized another story on here involving son,mom and a new camera.

Plagiarize? How? By acknowledging the source material? By incorporating the original author's name in the title? By explicitly using his characters as an introdutory device? I took optocynic's story as the basis for my own -- I have not copied his tale and claimed it as my work.

People telling me my writing is crap is one thing -- claiming I've stolen someone else's work as my own annoys me.

Anonymous 03/12/16
Meh

You were trying too hard, and that "fuck you if you don't like it" at the start just ruined it from the beginning.

Perhaps realise that being LESS specific about things makes MUCH more people interested in your story.

This is a fantasy story website (kinda the point in the incest/taboo category), stop writing story to just suit yourself and write them to suit everyone.
If you're doing it for just you, then print it off your computer and jack off in your own bed and leave us to a fantasy.

Useless writer, useless story, huge waste of time, didn't even get me wet.

The disclaimer at the start tells you what to expect -- if you read it and don't like it, that's up to you. As to "stop writing story to just suit yourself and write them to suit everyone" well that's clearly impossible because this story didn't work for you but others (see above) have loved it and given it 5 stars. If I changed it to suit you, it wouldn't have suited the others.

Optocynic 5000 posted

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New story submitted

Just sent in "The Optocynic 5000" which is a quick and dirty story.

Now that's out of the way, I plan to continue Leon22reloaded's story "The Family Business" which he's kindly given me blessing to do.

Have this to celebrate:

The importance of good grammar

I try to use correct grammar in my stories -- I'm self taught so I don't pretend to get everything right every time but the caption to this video made me realise some people have a looser grasp of grammar than I do:

So you deepthroated your step mom? That means your step mom has a dick and you swallowed it.

I'm not judging -- I like a dick girl in my stories every now and then -- but I think, judging by the picture, you meant to say "My stepmom deepthroated me"

Grammar's important in these instances.

Exciting news

Had an email today from one of my favourite authors at Literotica who hasn't been writing for a few years and has given me permission to continue one of his stories.

Can you guess who?